What the Fire Consumed

A member of a writer’s group I’ve been attending suggested we all write a 140-character short story for Thaumatrope.  For those who don’t know about it, Thaumatrope is a Twitter-based magazine of flash fiction.  The character limit for Twitter is 140, thus, the guidelines.  You can check them out at http://thaumatrope.greententacles.com.  I wrote a stor, but  they are closed to submissions.

It’s a cool idea.  Create a story with a beginning, middle, and end and do it in 140 characters.  I am extremely interested in the mechanics of editing out needless words and phrases.  This forces you to do just that.  You cannot have anything taking up space that doesn’t accomplish an objective.  I’ve always liked flash fiction.  This is less a flash than a spark.

I thought I would post it here, since the idea I used originated from this blog.  In “Opening A Vein,” I gave some insight to how I sometimes generate story ideas.  You can find the original post here: http://jackcampbelljr.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/opening-a-vein/

Without further ado, “What the Fire Consumed.”  This story is based on a single phrase of the Sylvia Plath poem “On Looking Into The Eyes of a Demon Lover.”  Thanks for reading.  Feel free to try the 140 character story yourself.  Post it in the comments, if you like.  I would be interested to see your results.

From http://wordzeal.com/flash-fiction-write-better/

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What the Fire Consumed

By

Jack Campbell, Jr.

The plungers descended; promised painless death.  A gallery of gawkers faded.   Consuming shadows crept, clawing for portions.  Soul-fueled pyres blazed.  They lied.

2 thoughts on “What the Fire Consumed

  1. Hi, my name is cecilia, i came across your name on another site and am quite stunned by your micro piece of work. I also strive to edit hard but am cursed with verboseness. Of course I am not a serious writer like you I just love words and their sounds.. see there I go again talking too much.. c

    • Thanks. It was a fun little exercise. I start off very verbose, but I really cut it down in edits. I love words that sound interesting next to each other and try to work with them as much as I can. Over time, my writing has gotten simpler, but better. Thanks for reading it.

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